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@@ -1,13 +1,15 @@
 ### Introduction
 
-I get to help out at Fulmo with various operational tasks since 2023. To me this is an opportunity to contribute to the Bitcoin ecosystem while figuring out what my main project in the space is.
+I get to help out with various operational tasks at Fulmo since
+2023. This is an opportunity for me to contribute to the Bitcoin
+ecosystem while figuring out what my main project in the space is.
 
-This report details my experiences at CCCamp, focusing on the
+This report details what I have experienced at CCCamp, focusing on the
 development, presentation, and impact of a mining demonstrator. It
 highlights the collaborative spirit of the Bitcoin community, the
-technical and environmental potential of the mining for demand
-response, and the invaluable feedback and engagement that I got from
-the community.
+technical and environmental potential of mining for demand response,
+as well as the invaluable feedback and engagement that I got from the
+community.
 
 The [Chaos Communication Camp (CCCamp)
 2023](https://events.ccc.de/camp/2023/infos/index.html), hosted in
@@ -22,7 +24,7 @@ collaboration.
 I identify with mesh networks and protocols like LOT49 since quite a
 while, but energy efficiency and cogeneration are also frequently on
 my mind. Hence, I got excited when Rootzoll mentioned that there would
-be a Bitcoin village at the CCCamp in the summer. I saw this as an
+be a Bitcoin village at the CCCamp that summer. I saw this as an
 opportunity to demonstrate the potential of Bitcoin miners as flexible
 assets to renewable energy grids. Fulmo encouraged this idea by
 offering to sponsor my ticket for CCCamp if I come up with a renewable
@@ -74,11 +76,11 @@ connectivity hampered my ability to collect data over extended periods
 of time. The laundry tumbler fitted in seamlessly at the main tent of
 the Bitcoin village and curious people frequently asked what it does
 and how it works. Someone told me that household appliances should be
-performing demand response rather Bitcoin miners and another visitor
-who was more familiar with Proof of Stake was intregued about
+performing demand response rather than mining Bitcoin and another
+visitor who was familiar with Proof of Stake was intregued about
 Bitcoin's ability to lower energy costs. Residents of the Bitcoin
-village shared stories about how they also used miners to as dryers,
-heaters and even in agriculture.
+village shared stories about how they had previously used miners as
+dryers, heaters and even in agriculture setups.
 
 <img src="images/dryer_at_camp.jpg" alt="Optional title" width="80%" style="display:block; margin: 0 auto;"/>
 
@@ -97,10 +99,10 @@ miner entirely off of solar energy whenever the battery is already
 charged. When running with just one hashboard, the miner's clockrate
 could be reduced such that it consumed less than 150 watt and I had up
 to 400 watt of solar power at my disposal. However, the charge
-controller I had selected only supported up to 10 amps of current -
+controller I selected only supported up to 10 amps of current -
 ie. 120 watt at 12 volts. Hence, I discharged the battery faster than
-I charged it, which was sufficient to present it as a laundry tumbler,
-but insufficient to demonstrate demand response.
+I charged it, which was sufficient to present the setup as a laundry
+tumbler, but insufficient to demonstrate demand response.
 
 
 
@@ -109,8 +111,8 @@ but insufficient to demonstrate demand response.
 The project was welcomed by everyone at the camp and I got encouraging
 feedback from developers at various Bitcoin companies. Questions
 revolved mostly arround what the demonstrator does, what the objective
-of the project was and where I would like to take the project in
-future and how soon something like this could be installed with an end
+of the project was, where I would like to take the project in future
+and how soon something like this could be installed with an end
 user. I was particularly honored by the [public
 encouragement](https://twitter.com/n1ckler/status/1693599396762452145)
 that I received from [Jonas Nick](https://github.com/jonasnick).
@@ -119,27 +121,27 @@ that I received from [Jonas Nick](https://github.com/jonasnick).
 
 ### Future Directions
 
-Future iterations of this project will focus on the batteries rather
-than monitoring the solar panels with a charge controller. One
-advantage of monitoring the batteries with a [smart
+Future iterations of this project will focus on monitoring the
+batteries with a [smart
 shunt](https://www.victronenergy.com/upload/documents/Datasheet-SmartShunt-EN.pdf)
-is that shunts measure higher currents than charge controllers and
-they give me a better picture of the battery's state than the charge
-controller does. Both the battery and the miner are complementary
-demand response tools, so understanding the battery and its
-state/needs is essential when making a holistic demand response
-solution irrespective of the energy source.
+rather than using a charge controller to monitor the solar panels. One
+advantage of monitoring the batteries is that shunts measure higher
+currents than charge controllers and they give me a better picture of
+the battery's state than the charge controller does. Both the battery
+and the miner are complementary demand response tools, so
+understanding the battery and its state/needs is essential when making
+a holistic demand response solution irrespective of the energy source.
 
 Future considerations also revolve around connectivity and mining
-payouts. Individual Bitcoin miners bundle their hashrates in pools to
-achieve more frequent payouts with limited hashrate, though the pools
-have custody of small amounts of Bitcoin until an individual miner's
+payouts. Individual Bitcoin miners bundle their effort in pools to
+achieve more frequent payouts with limited hashrate. However, the
+pools custody small amounts of Bitcoin until an individual miner's
 reward is sufficient to justify cost of an on-chain payout to the
 miner. Since this was an old miner running at a low hashrate, it would
 have taken years to reach the payout threshhold. Hence, I hope to make
 StratumV2 mining proxy that veriefies block templates and pays out via
-multiple cashu mints. This way the individual laundry tumblers could
-be reimbursed in realtime for their work.
+cashu mints. This way the individual laundry tumblers could be
+reimbursed for their work in realtime.
 
 Connectivity is also a concern when working with small amounts of
 stranded energy. The cost of an internet connection may not be
@@ -155,13 +157,13 @@ assets, so local mesh networks like
 built ontop of them, which allows miners to share the cost of
 [internet gateways](https://silent.link/rates) with other users.
 
-I hope to continue trying out these ideas in the hope of providing
-value while advancing these ideas. Thanks again to the teams at
-[Fulmo](https://fulmo.org/) and [21energy](https://21energy.com/) for
-encouraging this project. I also want to thank [chaincode
-labs](https://chaincode.com/) for providing amazing learning
-opportunities and a network for aspiring Bitcoin developers. Some of
-the ideas for future improvements above came from friends that I met
+I intend to continue thinking about such things in the hope of finding
+an opportunity to provide value while advancing these ideas. Thanks
+again to the teams at [Fulmo](https://fulmo.org/) and
+[21energy](https://21energy.com/) for encouraging this project. I also
+want to thank [chaincode labs](https://chaincode.com/) for providing
+amazing learning opportunities and a network for aspiring Bitcoin
+developers. Some of the ideas above came from friends that I met
 through chaincode labs.